Echoes of pierced hearts
Taunting evil deeds
Motherless child from a
Breathless before God
And his followers
Heat drenches a soaked soul
A sparrow breaks his wing
Black ash falls from the sky
Voodooed and seanced
A blur, a speck no one sees
If you moved from colored bruise beneath silken pour of sleeplessness
Supple backed, dewy salt, two thrust on tiptoe, catching breath
Shards blending, fizzured pulse, ever and ever, tongued capture
Flush against humid glass, hold–pressing fierce crimson, disturbing numinous hour of sewing
Children with boiled seaside sweets, deep in their catkin singing mouths, dream of a dark cast–shrouding
Yet as I quit–the hingeless drug
Your smudged anger envelops, the stray chill of my shoulder
As a bandage will hold us, burned into place.
Until moths pick their way from water-painted cocoon
Feeling their way in inked shiver, milked squid, gesturing tresses
Your long goose neck–bent to catch, last wetting of ground
For rain begins her throbbed drumming, swelling in granite intensity
Tasting cyanide and fruit
In the orange peel of day
Chasing last whisper
Of her quiet running horror.
Collaborative poem by Tre Loadholt & Candice Daquin
Inspiration: Sylvia Plath’s “Ariel” https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/49001/ariel
Tre Loadholt: https://acorneredgurl.com and https://medium.com/a-cornered-gurl
Candice Daquin: https://thefeatheredsleepcom.wordpress.com/
30 Replies to “Blur (collaborative poem w/Tre Loadholt)”
Fabulous! Bravo to both 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
Thank you. I have writers-block at the moment but Tre is one of those power-writers who always powers through any blocks in the road, she really inspired this one more me because she was the power in our collaboration and I’m very honored to work with her on this. I appreciate you reading it.
Thank you so much!
My pleasure <3
Wonderful phrases, e.g. gobfuls of glib adult…
You know, I think, how your kaleidoscopic flights capture me. Now, I shall have to go read Tre, who helped bring this one to being.
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Candice at TheFeatheredSleep collaborates on a poem.
Peace, thank you very much.
Hey, you. I’m very happy to see this go live. It’s an honor and my day is made.
You know what I’m gonna say, don’t you?
This is everything. And the task was an exceptional one. It comes to life and that’s great to see.
I have no idea what you’re going to say … 😉 !!!
Now we have to go back and forth saying ‘no, the honor is mine …’ for at least three days 😉
Tre is a really great writer who I hope you are following, her work is really some of the most original and passionate I’ve read on WP
She’s worth it Bob – thank you so much
Oh, you know. Please check your email, ma’am. 😁
Haha. Because we’re silly. But, it’s meant. Shh. Lol.
💙 Thanks for being awesome. This is major!
*dances around laughing*
Horray for being silly 😉 xo
YOU are major and I am chuffed to bits!
Indeed. I looked. I follow.
”Tasting cyanide and fruit
In the orange peel of day” I love it
Ah, this is wondrous! ❤
Speechless I am!
By the way, I was not getting your posts on my reader. So I unfollowed and followed again. Hope it helps.
Love it, who would have thought that I would be reading this phenomenal piece. Powerful indeed.
She’s covered in win and I was truly honored
You guys are awesome. How are you feeling Candice?
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