The kitchen, the harth, the space, is unlit
Weak light, nothing stirring
She is as still, as a breathing creature, can be
Sound… is for the world, chasing beyond itself
Where girls like her, hold tight to bus rails, wind messing their hair
Where children cling to parents, shy in perpetual game
Where men stoop to kiss women, full cheeks upturned
Music and the chink of movement, gypsy motion
Color and the russle of long skirts, like painted fans
A sky as blue as country girls eyes
The haggle of time
A red river, carved by motion
She wore those days, like a red dress, loose limbed and free
Unknowing yet, bestial crush of illness
Jeering like envious stranger, swallowing thin air
She is as still as a breathing creature can be
Sound, is for the world, chasing beyond itself
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What a gorgeous juxtaposition of the sounds, colors and movements of living to those of dying! I always learn here.
Your analysis is superb as that was the intention to give the sounds and colors to the moments of death and life. Thank you so much dear Tanya for reading xo
I really learn a lot a lot from you, Candice. Your poetry resonates deeply. The thanks is to you. Hugs.
To be as still as a breathing creature can be,
To catch even the faintest vibration of sound.
To be still so as to know all enveloping sound has to tell.
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TheFeatheredSleep – stillness and the panoply of sounds
Deeply beautiful.
The first 3 lines are so visual for me. When poetry becomes visual there is an added dimension. I could see it as a beautiful black and white photo or the silent first scene of a movie, which the rest of your poem could be adapted to! Wonderfully written. Thank you! Your ability to create a visual dimension with your poetry is a blessing and oh so rare gift!
I love that one of the tags is “courage,” as the poem distinctively points out in several spots–strength and measure. These lines:
“A sky as blue as country girls eyes
The haggle of time
A red river, carved by motion
She wore those days, like a red dress, loose limbed and free
Unknowing yet, bestial crush of illness
Jeering like envious stranger, swallowing thin air
She is as still as a breathing creature can be
Sound, is for the world, chasing beyond itself”
Beautifully mastered, Candice.
💓 thank you
You are very much welcome. *big hugs*
If you listen closely, there are sounds in stillness – the sounds we do not hear when the world is busy 🙂
The stillness when we’re ill is profound. Time stops, we hold our breath, afraid of movement, yet growing in strength as the rest of the world spins ’round us… That’s what your poem made me think of and experience. Maybe it’s in that stillness that we heal. Beautiful work once again, Candice. 💕
interesting thoughts here. Life is indeed a whirlwind of colors and sounds. Around and around us it spins never spilling the details of when it stopsll and changes the direction of the whirlwind nor the colors and soiunds from brilliance and goodness to shades of darkness and pain/sadness. 🙂 <3
Of all the wonderful lines, I choose this one that portrays the sound of music, and the joy of movement:
‘Music and the chink of movement, gypsy motion’
much love my friend… <3
🙂 I do so love movement of all kinds
Exactly right!
How right you are. That is EXACTLY what I was trying to convey, that awful stillness, the way time slows and it seems a day can be an eternity. But also as you say, a growing strength. Trying to be positive through the negative 🙂 Thank you dear one – you are right, through the stillness there is healing.
Ah that is so very true WiFiLess One. I hope your status changes soon meanwhile thank you for your visit it always makes me smile to see you pop up and Mighty gets happy too
Ah you are so right my friend
I’ve been very good about not bombarding … 🙂 Once I set my mind to it I usually keep it. I hope you are okay though.
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Hope you read my email from this morning, I be here whenever you need a friend. ♡
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A beautiful piece of writing!
Candice Louisa,
I missed you! And vice versa?
(Floods and hurricanes in my neighborhood these last months… omg)
Okay, now down to it.
(1) You wrote: “The kitchen, the harth, the space, is unlit”
I believe you meant to write “hearth” Reminds me of a one-room log cabin, of sorts.
(2) Next: “The haggle of time — A red river, carved by motion”
This gives me the impression of a teenager turning 20, whose femininity is also “not stirring”
(3) Then: ” She wore those days, like a red dress, loose limbed and free — Unknowing yet, bestial crush of illness”
This is the center of it, the conflict, the reason the “woman” is not stirring. A long life with the capability to have children but not the ability to make this happen – because of some condition.
(4) Finally: “Sound is for the world”
She is not of the world any longer. This is where she dies or, if alive, feels like her life is detached.
How incredibly sad. I hope this is not someone you know intimately. Makes me cry thinking about it.
Just want to hug this person.
(5) Or, it is an amazing personification of the moth in the picture. But, I choose the young woman. 🙂
Provocative! Nicely expressed.
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Your friend,
Larry
Dearest Larry. I love your analysis every time. It was about me and this ongoing health saga of suffering. I am hopeful I’ll recover but it’s beating me down so it’s been hard I know I’ll see the light but sometimes it’s hard to believe after months. I’m so sorry about flood damage are you fl or tx? I hope it’s getting worked out? Good grief that must be hard. I wish you a resolution on all fronts my friend. Detatched is the word for being sick a long time, your analysis was perfect. You do my work honor.
Well then, SUPER WARM AND FUZZY HUGS from Texas and also prayers for your recovery.
Keep fighting the good fight !
Go here:
https://marsearth.wordpress.com/2015/10/22/what-i-keep-telling-myself/
so that it may pick you up!
<3
Larry
Fellow Texan 💓💓💓